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hXc
22nd April 2006, 14:31
Here's a story that I wrote:

The Silent Witness

I looked up from my book, “The penguin history of New Zealand” to find that I was alone. My family had left the house without acknowledging the fact I was there. I didn’t like this book; I was only reading it because we had a history project due in a couple of days. However tedious this project was, I had to try if I had any hope of passing this year. I looked out the window to a completely miserable day, rain was pouring down and the clouds were growing darker by the second. I still puzzled over where my family had gone, perhaps to tend the sheep that would be dying from this extreme cold blast.

In the distance I saw a small movement, I ran over to the window and grabbed the binoculars. The movement had been nothing more than my brother jumping into a puddle. I zoomed in closer to find that it was not my brother, but a tiny little boy standing in waist deep water. I threw on my anorak and gumboots and ran out to him, the closer I got the further away he seemed to move, I reached the puddle where he was standing but nobody was there. Scared, I put my leg into the puddle to see if I could feel a body, nothing. Thunder tumbled through the darkening sky as my anorak could not cope with the immense volume of water and I started to get soaked.

I traipsed back into the warm of my house, shaken from seeing this tiny child. The boy must’ve just been the shape and shadows of the rain. I switch on the television to see a fashionable Japanese couple trying out the latest Mohave sunglasses; it made me sick to see such obviously preset infomercials. I couldn’t take the cheesy advertisements and decided to play on the computer: 3 new messages. All forwards. I checked them all; one consisted of a grey stepladder leaning against an equally boring wall. Pointless. Down the bottom was a lame poem about how bad it is to not send forwards on. I didn’t bother reading it but deleted it, next minute another message appears. A picture of the small boy in the puddle. What the?! That can’t be real. I delete it and try to call my Mom’s cell phone. It’s dead, no coverage.

A small pleading voice talks to me as if it were dying, I follow it in a trance. I have time to glance down at the morning’s paper and see a perfect square cut out. A coupon for Ordering’s, nothing significant. The voice comes back stronger and more malicious. It leads me out into the paddock. There I find my family, silent and helpless all lying slashed on the ground. I think nothing of it. I’m not me. I keep following the voice; it takes me further and further away from the house. I don’t want to fight it. Suddenly, silence...

The voice has gone and I am left on my own, in the middle of nowhere, I have no idea where I am. I know what I have to do though. I continue on for what seems like hours. I am finally at the destination. I run up and jump. Tumbling into the chasm. Falling until I reach the cold hard rocks and dirt. Death comes as fast as my life left. The innocent child looks down on me lying silent and battered.

Dont_die_wondering
22nd April 2006, 15:21
not bad dude :yes: , its interesting to read, you should do more.

hXc
22nd April 2006, 15:41
There's a poetry thread of mine somewhere on here...

http://www.kiwibiker.co.nz/forums/showthread.php?t=14995

MidnightMike
22nd April 2006, 15:57
Wow, great stuff :yes:
You do some of those writing comps?

Sniper
22nd April 2006, 16:09
Deep.......

oldrider
22nd April 2006, 16:18
Only 15!
As you grow older an imagination like that is either going to earn you a lot of trouble or a lot of money. :yes: Be careful out there, choose wisely. :blip: Good luck, John.

hXc
22nd April 2006, 16:22
You do some of those writing comps?
Nah don't like competitions.

MidnightMike
22nd April 2006, 16:25
Nah don't like competitions.

But you get free stuff, FREE STUFF !!!! :blip:

notme
22nd April 2006, 16:48
Do you write stuff in the band? I come up with some lyrics sometimes, but they usually just scare the others. Drummers are weird.
:rockon:

MSTRS
22nd April 2006, 17:48
Do you write stuff in the band? I come up with some lyrics sometimes, but they usually just scare the others. Drummers are weird.
:rockon:
Rule 23 in the band's rule book is......
If the drummer brings along some of 'his' stuff for the band to play, it's time to get a new drummer!!!

hXc
22nd April 2006, 17:57
Do you write stuff in the band? I come up with some lyrics sometimes, but they usually just scare the others. Drummers are weird.
:rockon:
We only play covers anyway

BuFfY
22nd April 2006, 18:05
That is a great story Zac! I would love to read more of your stuff :yes:

Motoracer
22nd April 2006, 21:24
I enjoyed the read. You've got talent. :)

GSX-RJIM
22nd April 2006, 21:28
Very good writing there my friend, it reminded me of a dream i had.

Dont_die_wondering
23rd April 2006, 10:40
There's a poetry thread of mine somewhere on here...

http://www.kiwibiker.co.nz/forums/showthread.php?t=14995
really good stuff dude :2thumbsup its been ages since i last wrote some poetry..also started writing a book when i was 14, when i was like 16 i re-wrote most of it, still got it, just havent had time to do more

notme
23rd April 2006, 13:38
Rule 23 in the band's rule book is......
If the drummer brings along some of 'his' stuff for the band to play, it's time to get a new drummer!!!

:mega: OI!

Actually I agree....mostly <_<