My writing

[Toast]

Yo hxc...'somewhere in the night' is damn good...

'a tribute to...' Was that inspired by doing a runner by chance? Certainly had that effect on me.

PlacidFemme, that first one you posted is a stunner...

I'm sure the rest of them posted up on here are too...but I'm all poem'd out for now...

[hXc]

Yo hxc...'somewhere in the night' is damn good...

'a tribute to...' Was that inspired by doing a runner by chance? Certainly had that effect on me.

PlacidFemme, that first one you posted is a stunner...

I'm sure the rest of them posted up on here are too...but I'm all poem'd out for now...

'A Tribute To...' was inspired by a Pink Floyd Experience concert. All the lights and things.

[Goblin]

[QUOTE=hXc] Feedback would be nice too...


Well hxc, coming from the mind of a 14 year old, sounds like you have some serious issues. Now dont red rep or abuse me for giving my OPINION! OK? This is only MY opinion.
I wake alone sounds like you have a secret fantasy to kill your mother.

Fantasy and reality reeks of gender issues.

For us there is no death reminds me of the christian fantasy of "heaven"

A tribute to...sounds like drug induced ramblings.

Sacrifice....did you see Shindlers List?

Kids vs society....Military school might help you there....bit of good old discipline and self control!

Necrophilia....That's just SICK!

Society...I'm surprised you are still alive.

Set free...I think you're in love with Kitty.

The others are actually quite good. Well done and all the best with the band.

[jazbug5]

Uh... not sure he's the one with the 'issues' here?

[Hitcher]

My thoughts too...

[froggyfrenchman]

'A Tribute To...' was inspired by a Pink Floyd Experience concert. All the lights and things.

I can see that...

Was a fuggn awesome show eh? For some reason, those lights captivated me alot more after i went outside for that smoke at half time...
Front row seats Cant wait till they come back!

[Colapop]

For a 14 y/o your writing has depth and perception, hell for anybody you've got that. I'll have to nab a couple from my work computer before I could post anything. As far as the comments about 'issues' show me a teenager that doesn't have issues and I'll show you someone ho's repressing their emotions.

[hXc]

I can see that...

Was a fuggn awesome show eh? For some reason, those lights captivated me alot more after i went outside for that smoke at half time...
Front row seats Cant wait till they come back!

I'll talk to Darren (guitarist) and see when they come back. I may have a couple of surprises up my sleeve if you behave yourself

[froggyfrenchman]

sounds good, but im afraid i dont behave myself for anyone... a matter of principle you muse understand. On the subject, you ready for sunday?

[hXc]

As far as the comments about 'issues' show me a teenager that doesn't have issues and I'll show you someone ho's repressing their emotions.

Quite right with that. I've had to deal with a lot of shit since form 1.

My best mate in form 1 had a heart attack - Fucking hard to deal with. It's not right for 10/11 year olds to have heart attacks.

A family member died in form 2. I had 2-3 lots of surgery.

A close friend of myself, yungatart and MSTRS was killed in a car accident in 3rd form. I had MAJOR surgery (5 hours)

My best mate in 4th form killed himself. I'm still coming to terms with everything and it would be one of the hardest things I've ever had to deal with in life. I do not wish it upon anyone to have a friend/family member do this.

Thank you for your thoughts and comments about my work.

[Goblin]

As far as the comments about 'issues' show me a teenager that doesn't have issues and I'll show you someone ho's repressing their emotions.

Show me ANYONE who doesnt have issues.....fuck we all have issues, it's how we deal with them that matters.

This is good....communication has opened up somewhat. If this boy feels the need to express his emotions on an "Adult Orientated" site he should learn not to lash out and abuse people who do not agree with him. I for one, don't appreciate being called a "Fuckwit" by a 14 year old child, for giving my opinion. You people might think that that is acceptable behaviour and even encourage it, but I dont. Call me old fashioned but when I was 14 I wouldn't even contemplate calling an adult a fuckwit let alone put it in writing. We were taught something called "Respect". Something that is severely lacking in the youth of today.

Now this boy does show some artistic talent. Don't know about necrophilia tho...that's just sick. Ewww!

[hXc]

sounds good, but im afraid i dont behave myself for anyone... a matter of principle you muse understand. On the subject, you ready for sunday?

Yeah mate I'm ready. What about you?

[froggyfrenchman]

Show me ANYONE who doesnt have issues.....fuck we all have issues, it's how we deal with them that matters.

This is good....communication has opened up somewhat. If this boy feels the need to express his emotions on an "Adult Orientated" site he should learn not to lash out and abuse people who do not agree with him. I for one, don't appreciate being called a "Fuckwit" by a 14 year old child, for giving my opinion. You people might think that that is acceptable behaviour and even encourage it, but I dont. Call me old fashioned but when I was 14 I wouldn't even contemplate calling an adult a fuckwit let alone put it in writing. We were taught something called "Respect". Something that is severely lacking in the youth of today.

Now this boy does show some artistic talent. Don't know about necrophilia tho...that's just sick. Ewww!

Can understand your point of view, however, one of the beautys of an internet forum is that we are all on an equal footing. we can all say what we mean without the visual barriers that would stop certian comments if we were talkin in person. I dont encourage the name calling, but if we were all in a room, i would hesitate to give advise to those much older than myself. As for respect. Respect is earned in my world, not a given right.





ANYWAY.... (rant over)
Yeah mate, me and ali are all set for sunday. Will be taking both the buckets and bringing a racing virgin with us too i think. "The Deluxe" and "The Oozing Donkey Cock" are in pretty good form and ready to anihalate you lot. We are both racing in the licenced class now and the noob will be in novice. Have you got a MNZ licence?

[hXc]

Yeah mate, me and ali are all set for sunday. Will be taking both the buckets and bringing a racing virgin with us too i think. "The Deluxe" and "The Oozing Donkey Cock" are in pretty good form and ready to anihalate you lot. We are both racing in the licenced class now and the noob will be in novice. Have you got a MNZ licence?

Nah mate ain't got one. Wait till they renew them so pay $90 and get a full season till next time. Well me and dad got the CT and the GS so should be good. You going down early to help sweep?

[Colapop]

I agree with you about the respect issue. I personally have not felt the need to abuse or be abused that way (at least on this site).
My point is that the expression of self is better than the destruction of self. In this forum there are terms phrases and abuses that are regularly thrown about by people who have a lot less respect for themsleves than they do for other users here. To choose to present some of his work in this forum, of all places, takes a lot of courage. The thick skin that we (generally) learn to aquire here has to be able to breath, expand and contract to allow growth without cynicism, and I think that in this case is what we are seeing here.
Cows cut in half and pickled in formaldehide and humans 'plasticised' are not my taste (or nechrophillia) but occasionally boundaries must be explored to create an artistic expression. Bold move young man.
Col