1st ever Magazine Ad - care to critique?

[retro asian]

Hi Everyone,

I'm attempting to do my first ever Magazine Advert. I'm not trained in marketing or design or anything, so would be interested to hear what those in the biz (or who have the skills) think.

This is going at the bottom of a RH page.
The target audience is Electronics hobbyists/enthusiasts, and I'm trying to stay close to our company "design style" with the fonts and colours.

Would love any feedback or ideas.

Cheers!!

[EJK]

Just a little "debug" James?

[retro asian]

oops photo didn't work 1st time

[Blackshear]

Because I know nothing at all about effective advertising, it's natural for a witty comeback to make up for said lack of skill.


MORE COWBELL!

[EJK]

OK as a "dumb customer's" view (myself) I think it's quite good. Very simple and catchy, however it would look more comfortable if the title texts (not the URL) were alittle bit more bigger.

How about not too much objects scattered? Maybe have just 5 types of different electronics? (And make them bigger)

My $0.02

Note: Love the white background with black N red theme.

[Danae]

I would suggest "over one million" as opposed to "over a million"

Nice presentation tho

[popa griffin]

I hate adds like this.

Always makes me think to high priced for people with millions of dollars instead of "hey summit for the average jo smog"

[MidnightMike]

Keeping with all of your elements/ text etc I would have gone in this direction....

[retro asian]

I hate adds like this.

Always makes me think to high priced for people with millions of dollars instead of "hey summit for the average jo smog"

Interesting. Needs more sex appeal?
I have some more creative and funnier ideas, but I need to meet approval with the sponsor...which limits me somewhat.

Also some of our customers are design engineers in large corporates, so we have a "public image" to maintain.

I would suggest "over one million" as opposed to "over a million"

Thanks. That's better England.

more comfortable if the title texts (not the URL) were alittle bit more bigger.

Was thinking that myself. Although I've heard that text look bigger in Print.

[ready4whatever]

i think the components should stand out, instead of being a hundred little bits, you really need to focus to look at them. ads should jump out

[retro asian]

Keeping with all of your elements/ text etc I would have gone in this direction....

Wow, that makes the company name stand out a lot more...

[TOTO]

If the pages if the magasine are white, you may have a problem with the add not standing out enougn. Introducing a border(red ?) or your companys colour background can help with this.

Also agree that the components appear a little tiny. Making them bigger to fill the add, will help the the stand-out effect.

[Big Dave]

[MidnightMike]

Wow, that makes the company name stand out a lot more...

Exactly. I'm a bit of a grid nazi sometimes, but in the first one the companies name didn't jump out at you, so throwing that flow from the words and image into company wordmark / logo works well.

i think the components should stand out, instead of being a hundred little bits, you really need to focus to look at them. ads should jump out

You're right the ad should jump out. But the components shouldn't compete with the main text and Logo...

[Big Dave]

Best thing to make an advert stand out are tits. L-)

Next best is vacant space. Particular in a geek mag.

You've told them what's in it for them and the URL presents a call to action.

Midnight mikes lay is job done.